What makes a good haiku?

Posted: August 28, 2013 in Uncategorized
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This is just my thoughts and they don’t really mean much, but at the same time why not write something? 

I feel like writing only three short lines would be very easy, but I see my own writings, and others that I say that just didn’t come out right. A lot of them just can’t speak to you very well. Then, I pondered the idea what is a good haiku? 

I believe a way/format/concept of a haiku is the following: 

First line- Abstract idea

Second line- Abstract idea 

First two lines just need to be separate thoughts/unrelated 

The third line- Gives you the insight

Whether it explains the common ground between the first two lines or it brings up a new concept and the first two lines somehow fit into it. 

A human being 

See what you can’t see
Love what you never loved
A better human

This haiku has gotten a lot of attention, and it is over 2-3 weeks old, and it still gets views everyday. 

The first two lines leave you at the thought of So What? And the third line brings it back together. Maybe this way of constructing a haiku can be looked at like a metaphor with an explanation at the end.

 

Comments
  1. pcesofme says:

    Haiku- (sounds like a sneeze)
    Don’t overthink it… just write it, spit it out!
    Ah-choo. – bless you!

  2. Brenda says:

    The haiku as a riddle, hmm. I like it. I also read that a haiku should leave things unexpressed. A haiku that only expresses 60% of the idea is one that people keep coming back to.

    • judithgreene says:

      Definately, that blank space in the text, or, whats not said, can be filled with meaning by the reader.

    • Yes. That is the point of any writing I guess? To get you think about something. Even if it has answers, the reader may disagree or spark new ideas.

      • Brenda says:

        My most recent analogy I’m toying with: the writer creates a mirror and holds it up to the reader. Some entertain, and the reader walks away feeling better about life. Some challenge, and the reader takes away questions. Some entrance, and the reader comes back for more. How do we create a mirror that entrances? Another word for entrance — engage. Part of the reader needs to come into the story or poem and remain, like in a mirror.

      • That made a lot of sense. I agree with all three ideas. Just the idea of a mirror and what a mirror can symbolize and show us through writing is neat.

      • Brenda says:

        Thanks. I tend to mull things over for a long time, so this is not a fully-baked idea yet. I’m glad you like it. Your post was very thoughtful and made me think, right after I wrote my first haiku since high school. Perhaps I will have to try again… 🙂

  3. kalabalu says:

    Good point 🙂 First two lines never make any sense, its the third that wakes you up

  4. Gome Tháng Sáu says:

    hi there. nice to meet you.
    i think, a good haiku is using a few words to describe, but between words, we can feel a silence. From that silence, we can think a about another meaning of that haiku.
    A haiku with a lot of meanings
    i love Haiku very much, i like reading your Haikus too. I won a Haiku Prize from Japan Vietnam Cultural program last year. Hope to see more from you.
    Sorry for my bad English.

  5. howanxious says:

    First of all, a haiku is not a haiku without a season word. Most of what we all write today are senryu.
    I liked your way, but in traditional sense- the first and the third line are related in a way, while the second one is something different. Moreover, the first and the third line should be interchangeable. And most importantly, it is all about capturing a particular moment.

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  7. Aimer Shama says:

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  9. ganza_art says:

    Haiku is about size also. It is very strict for syllabus

  10. ganza_art says:

    Haiku is about size also. It is very strict for syllable.

  11. Iona Nerissa says:

    I am more of a traditionalist.. for me Haiku has to deal with seasons or nature. I reserve everything else for Senryu.

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